Tutor Feedback
Here is a link to my tutor’s feedback for this assignment and also my comments and how I am responding to the feedback:
OCA – Photography 3 – Learning Log
Tutor Feedback
Here is a link to my tutor’s feedback for this assignment and also my comments and how I am responding to the feedback:
Assessment Criteria
Assignment Four
Demonstration of technical and visual skills
I have created a set of eight images with additional side images and text. I am happy with how they have turned out. I believe they really do demonstrate my technical and visual skills. I have implemented various techniques over the course of my work and have developed from each assignment. Each location has three parts to it, the main images, the side mapping image and the text. I wanted them to work together as a set. I decided to print them out and move them around to get the right composition. Whilst I feel I have know found.
Quality of outcome
This assignment gave me a chance to narrow down my images to create a cohesive set of images. I had multiple images of each location. I decided to lay them out and see which would work best together. This was a difficult decision to make, as it meant committing to a series of images to reflect my intent. I am happy with these eight images. I feel they work as individual images but also together. I did feel I need to add something. I always had an idea to include maps somehow, in order to contextualise the locations. I felt it may give structure to my work. I also had an idea to include my version of a strong women. I felt I needed to bring an aspect of women to contrast with the male dominance. I decided to combine these two things. I began experimenting. I ended up with the images of women from my family, who are my ancestors, who are apart of me, and who would follow me on this journey, with the actual journey. I am happy with the outcome of the images. I introduced text to the image. Keeping with the religious theme, I felt bible quotes would be best. I choose quotes which highlighted the inequality. Some of these quotes are powerful and have a real impact. I brought all three elements together, and I felt them worked well.
The issue I have is with the print quality. The images are not as clear and concise as I would have liked.
Demonstration of creativity
I have, in this assignment, brought another element in to represent a strong female connection. I decided to use my own archive of images and use picture of the women in my family. I also included maps of the locations. These take the form of a small collage which are to be looked at next to the main images.
Context
To contrast the strong male presence, I have introduced a feminine aspect. I wanted something personal to me, as I was making this journey, I felt images of women in my family would be appropriate. My feminine aspects contrast the male domination in these scenes and life in general. I have brought in my own family archive by doing this. I have used various techniques throughout my work. I have utilised a craft associated with women, I have included maps and I am highlighting the exclusion of inequality women face. My work fits in to feminist art, but has aspects of psychogeography, found images and postmodernism.
Assignment Images & Reflective Commentary
Here is a link to my images and how I have cut them down:
I had multiple images from each location so this gave me choice. I have narrowed them down and have made slight changes on a few of the images of how I think they can be improved. I have eight final main images for my series. I would have probably had more, but unfortunately due to the Coronavirus outbreak I have not been able to go out and photograph.
Here is a link to my sub-series map images:
I decided I wanted to add another element to this assignment. I wanted to bring in the constant between the inequality and male dominance eluded to in my main images, and some how show my version of a strong women. I though about this for a long time and decided that I would use images of women from my family. These would come from my own family archive. This would allow the images to be more personal to me and keep to the fact that I am also on my own personal journey. They are my family, the women who have influenced me and made me me, they have ‘followed’ me on this journey, hence why I combined their images with the mapping images. Including the maps was always a part of my original plan, I feel this combination works well together. It shows the woman are following me on my journey as a woman through a male-dominated path.
Here is a link to the accompanying text:
Again text was part of my original plan. I just wasn’t sure what it would say. I thought about maybe a poem, or a speech, but then I decided to keep to the religious theme and use quotes from the bible highlighting the inequality.
Now I have all of my images, I needed to think about how to set them out in a complete series. There are three parts to each image now, similar to a triptych format. Triptych usually has religious connotations, so is apt for my series. For this assignment, I have just set them out, but for my final submission I will sort-out a background for the images to settle on.
I have made some sketches and set the images to see how they look:











I have narrowed it down to two set-ups which I think will look suitable. Here’s the first:


Here’s the second:


Assignment Images
Here are my images as a complete series following the first format:
Location One

Location Two

Location Three

Location Four

Location Five

Location Six

Location Seven

Location Eight

Here are my images as a complete series following the second format:
Location One

Location Two

Location Three

Location Four

Location Five

Location Six

Location Seven

Location Eight

Here are the images by location (not in any format):
Location One



Location Two



Location Three



Location Four



Location Five



Location Six



Location Seven



Location Eight



Cutting Down
My next step is to cut down my image to get my final selection. This is going to be a difficult process as I needed to look at each image individually but also as a whole and how they work in the series. I made several different collages of each location for choice, however I think cutting them down is going to be difficult, as I will have to be brutal in my selection. I will be looking at which images work and portray what I want the audience to see but they also need to work together, which is going to be a challenge. I have 27 images in total and 8 locations. This is probably on the the biggest choices I will have to make in my body of work. I will tackle this by looking at one location at a time and then looking at them collectively.
Location One
These were the first collages I made. I was happy with them and am unsure which to pick. I like this image a lot, even though it is quite simple. I feel the bars create the illusion of being excluded, symbolising that women can’t get in.

But I like this image too, it has the same basic image as the first but has other elements added in. The murky path, leading up to the door within the glass windows, featuring male figures. The door shut, not allowing entry. The metal fencing to the side, showing restriction. The immovable structures of the church, possibly symbolising the difficulty experienced in inequality. There are no names visible on the gravestones, showing parallels of being lost in history and time.

I have choose the second image, but have made some changes. I have included the bars across the whole image as I did like the base image with the bars. I cut out the bars in-between the window bars, so they didn’t obscure the view of the male figures on the stained glass window. Here is my final image:

Location Two
I really like this image as the way I have positioned the paddock appears to stop entry from the bridge to the church, it’s off-limits. It shows you cannot carry on your journey on the path. I like the effect of the main image being out-of-focus, you can still see what the objects are but it signifies the lack of clarity, the uneven visions, and possibly a murky area where some people believe gender inequality doesn’t exist and disputes it’s existence.

This next image is slightly different and looks at the site in a different way. We can see the path goes off to the side rather than to the destination, and along it is a pebbled rocky surface representing the rocky road of gender inequality. The steps are positioned amongst the stained glass window which opens to show the front door of the church, which is shut to us. The higher window is barely visible through the thick hedge row, showing that gender inequality can be overlooked by some as it isn’t always visible to everyone.

I have chosen the former image:

Location Three
This first images shows a barrier between the viewer and the destination. But added to this is two sections of solid impenetrable objects, giving the illusion that you can’t see in. The gate won’t let you in and the sections symbolise that fact you can’t see in. It gives me the feeling of exclusion when looking at this image.

The next image also gives the impression of being denied access. The path of the images is blocked by a stained glass window, an immovable object, symbolising the difficulty of removing gender inequality. You cannot see through the stained glass window, but the bits you can, simply show objects outside. The images looking up give the impression of uneven footing, the gravestone behind the trees, makes me think of something forgotten, lost almost. The chain for the bell hangs down, but the church remains out of reach. At the bottom, lays a stone which is cracked, showing the uneven grounding woman are on, the crack highlight a problem in ours lives. This is the image I have chosen.

Location Four
I was never completely sure about this location. I struggled to get a college I was completely happy with. I have had a look through my archive of images from this site and honestly I don’t think I could create another collage that would be better than the ones I have created. Having said that, I think this image does work. It doesn’t feature the actual church, but rather the graveyard with the restrictive feature of the gate. The graves could symbolise the lost souls in gender inequality, those who have been overlooked and forgotten about maybe. The untended graves, perhaps they have been forgotten. This example and feeling of loss and being forgotten could be a synonym for women affected by gender inequality.

I have decided to use this image, but with a slight change. I have cut around the church and placed it on a background of a stained glass window. You cannot see through this window at all, so it heightens the barrier between those who are included and allowed in and those who are excluded and not allowed in. Here it is:

Location Five
Simple 1 + Simple 2
This images features the church in the background with a path blocked by a gate. This actually represents my actual time at this location, as it was extremely icy, I couldn’t actually reach the path, I kept sliding down it. This felt so relatable to what I am trying to show. I was so near yet couldn’t get there, I couldn’t physically complete this journey. Just like gender inequality, it is a struggle to reach equality, we just haven’t been able to make that journey yet.

Similar with this next image, the church and destination is just visible yet we cannot get past this massive barrier, the rocks. This can symbolise the barriers women face in life. The are rough, immovable, and very difficult to overcome.

I have chosen the former image, but I wanted to add something extra to my original image, so I added the rocks to each side, so you cannot physically get to the church, it has create a immovable barrier. Here is the amended image:

Location Six
This image is very simple, with just two parts. It it quite dark but I feel it might have a place in the series. Looking at the dark time of inequality. Being unable to see into the church, gives the impression of exclusion. But comparing it with this other image at the same location, it is very different.

This one is almost surreal, it stands out. The complex elements have a chaotic feel, which eludes to the complexity of the issue at hand, rather than its simplicity. It has multiple layers with multiple connotations. I really like this image, hence why I have chosen it for my final selection.

Location Seven
I like how the majority of this image is taken up by the ragged rocks, symbolising the uneven dangerous inequality. This image is also quite surreal with the colours. The church is surrounded by a wooden arch, almost protecting the building from access or creating a boundary surrounding it.

This next image is quite eye-catching. The shadows of the trees casting on the church is quite chaotic and adds another dimension. The windows have been replaced with alternative images of the church, symbolising that there is no way to get in, we are being prohibited from entry or even seeing in. Alluding to the ‘boy’s club’ of life, society and religion.

I have chosen this image.

Location Eight
Location eight was an easy decision for me. I feel this image works, it is simple yet effective. You see this immovable wall with the church viewable through the window, yet this is covered with a keep out sign. Showing that you are prohibited from this place. It alludes to the restrictions women face in the world. The image of the church is also restricted by the wall, this has narrowed our perception of the location, simpler to peoples perceptions in life.

Sub-Series
I felt that I still had more that I could add to my project. This actually coincided with the Coronavirus outbreak. I am having to shield so am unable to go outside and photograph more at the moment. I have always thought about bringing maps into my work, to reinforce the journey part and the give some context but without being too specific. I also thought about how I could contrast the inequality with ‘strong women’. I then had the idea to use images from my own personal archive of female family members and bring these in somehow.
My idea is to combine the map images and the female images together, to symbolise that my family, the strong women are with me on this journey.
Here is my post on my archive images.
I have used Ordinate Survey mapping and have printed them in colour and in black and white, to try and see which suits the format better.
Here is my post on my mapping and combining the images.
I will also be using text alongside my main image and side image, here is a link to my post on texts.
OS Mapping. At: https://osmaps.ordnancesurvey.co.uk
Mapping
After I decided on using mapping, I began experimenting with combining the maps and the archive images. I wanted to give the impression that the women are on the journey with me. However they are not in the main images, inferring they are excluded, which keeps to the theme of gender inequality.
I have printed and cut out the images of women:

Here is one with a colour map:

Here is one with the black and white map:

Whilst the black and white images looks good, I think the colour map looks better. It shows better contrast between the two elements. The little bit of colour from the map, really makes the image stand out.
I then tried moving them around and rearranging to see which went best:









I then stuck the images together, cut them out and re-photographed them. Here are the eight finished images that I have chosen to use in my assignment:








Update:
These above are the original one I made for a previous assignment, I have now reprinted and redone them for the final assignment, here they are:








The finish on these images is better. The print quality of the image as a whole is better and so is my cutting out technique.
Text
I have looked at different ways to include text in my work. There are many artists who have done the same.
I have thought about including the words to a poem, or something centred on inequality. But then I got thinking about the recurring themes in my work and decided to include quotes from the Bible. This means I can keep to a central theme with the quotes revolving around women, religion and inequality.
Here are some quotes I have found.
“Unto the woman he said, I will greatly multiply thy sorrow and thy conception; in sorrow thou shalt bring forth children; and thy desire shall be to thy husband, and he shall rule over thee” – Genesis 3:16
“And Adam called his wife’s name Eve” – Genesis 3:20
“Let the woman learn in silence with all subjection” – 1 Timothy 2:11
“But I suffer not a woman to teach, nor to usurp authority over the man, but to be in silence” – 1 Timothy 2:12
“And Adam was not deceived, but the woman being deceived was in the transgression” – 1 Timothy 2:14
“Let your women keep silence in the churches: for it is not permitted unto them to speak; but they are commanded to be under obedience as also saith the law” – 1 Corinthians 14:34
“And if they will learn any thing, let them ask their husbands at home: for it is a shame for women to speak in the church” – 1 Corinthians 14:35
“Wives, submit yourselves unto your own husbands, as unto the Lord” – Ephesians 5:22
“For the husband is the head of the wife” – Ephesians 5:23
“let the wives be to their own husbands in every thing” – Ephesians 5:24
“to be discreet, chaste, keepers at home, good, obedient to their own husbands” – Titus 2:5
“being in subjection unto their own husbands” – 1 Peter 3:5
“For the man is not of the woman: but the woman of the man” – 1 Corinthians 11:8
“Neither was the man created for the woman; but the woman for the man” – 1 Corinthians 11:9
“But I would have you know, that the head of every man is Christ; and the head of the woman is the man; and the head of Christ is God” – 1 Corinthians 11:3
“And the Lord God said, It is not good that the man should be alone; I will make him an help meet for him” – Genesis 2:18
“And the rib, which the Lord God had taken from man, made he a woman, and brought her unto the man” – Genesis 2:22
“she shall be called Woman, because she was taken out of Man” – Genesis 2:23
“And the man said, The woman whom thou gavest to be with me, she gave me of the tree, and I did eat” – Genesis 3:12
“And unto Adam he said, Because thou hast hearkened unto the voice of thy wife” – Genesis 3:17
“and your sons and your daughters shall prophesy, and your young men shall see visions, and your old men shall dream dreams” – Acts 2:17
I am thinking of having the verses complete with where they can be found, or just the verse, or just the chapter and verse. I think these verses are a god contrast between the images and what the text says and the deeper meaning behind it.
I have tried different fonts to see which works best. Here is a sample of the ones I have tried:






I think I like this one the best:

I have put it next to my main image and the sub-series image and I feel it works. It has a classical feel to it without being too fancy. You can understand it and it looks good. I did try and handwrite the quote but it just didn’t look right, overall I prefer the computer generated font. It just looks better in my opinion.
I need eight quote for my eight main images. I narrowed them down by comparing the quotes with the mapping images that I have created. I wanted them to fit together, so tried to match the quotes with the complete mapping images. Here is a link to the mapping images that I created:
Update – 1st of July
Following the feedback from my tutor, I have changed the text. I tried to find a text close to that of the Bibles. I found the following. I think it suits the text better than the one I had. I have also resized them in portion to my images.








Update for Final Assessment
I have taken onboard my tutor’s feedback and changes the font to a more greyer tone. This does improve the look significantly. Here is the finished text:








Bibliography
1 Corinthians 11:3. Holy Bible: King James Version.
1 Corinthians 14:35. Holy Bible: King James Version.
1 Timothy 2:11. Holy Bible: King James Version.
1 Timothy 2:12. Holy Bible: King James Version.
Ephesians 5:22. Holy Bible: King James Version.
Genesis 3:16. Holy Bible: King James Version.
Genesis 3:20. Holy Bible: King James Version.
Titus 2:5. Holy Bible: King James Version.
Archive Images
I have been looking through my archive images of my family for my sub-series experimentation. I have quite a few, so I have re-photographed them for use digitally.
I photographed them, then edited them to crop and straighten and enhance if necessary. Here are the images:










I will now experiment with how to include these in my work. I do like the idea of having images of the women in my family, as it always a connection between my images and myself and my history.
I am thinking of combing the mapping images with these family archive images. I want it to show that these women are on the journey with me, they are my family and are with me. But they will not feature in the main images, in keeping with the exclusion of women theme of my work.
Here are my images cut out:

Here is a link to my mapping images but also of combining the two:
I firstly narrowed down my images to 30 for assignment one. I then decided to narrow them down further. I printed my images to 6×4, and laid them out.
This was probably one of the hardest things to do for these images. The process of cutting down needs thought. I laid them out and used my instincts but also I was trying to think ahead in my mind. I was trying to imagine how the images would work together and which wouldn’t. It did take me time, as I would go over and over trying different combinations until I reached a point where the images worked to me. The images were saying something to me and I felt the combinations worked.
This is location one:

I took away the ones that I didn’t feel anything from, and was left with these.

I moved them about and rearranged them to see different combinations.

Then narrowed them down further.

Here are my final images I have chosen for the first assignment.

For the next location I did similar to what for the above. Here is my process




Here is location three:




Here is location four:




Here are the final images so far:


Cutting Down
I firstly narrowed down my images to 30 for assignment one. I then decided to narrow them down further. I printed my images to 6×4, and laid them out.
This was probably one of the hardest things to do for these images. The process of cutting down needs thought. I laid them out and used my instincts but also I was trying to think ahead in my mind. I was trying to imagine how the images would work together and which wouldn’t. It did take me time, as I would go over and over trying different combinations until I reached a point where the images worked to me. The images were saying something to me and I felt the combinations worked.
This is location one:

I took away the ones that I didn’t feel anything from, and was left with these.

I moved them about and rearranged them to see different combinations.

Then narrowed them down further.

Here are my final images I have chosen for the first assignment.

For the next location I did similar to what for the above. Here is my process




Here is location three:




Here is location four:




Here are the final images so far:


Location One – Contact Sheets

Location Two – Contact Sheets

















Location Three – Contact Sheets










Location Four – Contact Sheets










Location Two – Contact Sheets

















Location Three – Contact Sheets










Location Four – Contact Sheets










Location Five – Contact Sheets













Location Six – Contact Sheets













Location Seven – Contact Sheets





























Location Eight – Contact Sheets






















